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To whom it may concern:
I am writing this letter as a recommendation letter to suggest Mr.x as a prospective student for your program.

I have known x for two years as his teacher while he asked me to write a recommendation letter for him. He took a course under my supervision: the lab of computer architecture. He achieved a perfect mark: a full 20/20 this shows his perfect performance clearly and beyond his excellent score, he has other outstanding qualities that qualify him for your program. These sorts of courses are based on detecting, analyzing and then solving the issues and he showed that he was capable and he did it well as an innovative student.
به جای این قسمت بنفش شده میتونی دو یا حداکثر سه تا از صفات خوبت رو بگی....
Another positive aspect of his personality was his interest in teamwork. The course was generally depending on teamwork and he was able to get along with his group members very well to solve the problems perfectly. We had a time pressure in each class session to complete a whole part of the course and he did it suitably too. Finally his great mark distinguished him as a top student of the class.
به نظر من کلا این بخش قرمز حذف بشه... کلا بی فایده و تکراری خواهد بود از نظر یک استاد...
Based on my experience and knowledge about him and his personality, he has sufficient potential to do as a meritorious student at the MSc programs.
این قسمت آبی شده رو به نظرم دقیقا بنویس کدوم رشته..
Please don’t hesitate to contact me later, if you need more information about Mr. X
Sincerely

For more information, contact to:
x

دوست من
به نظرم خیلی خوب نیست این توصیه نامت اگرچه معلومه خیلی روش وقت گزاشتی... باید خیلی کوتاه تر باشه و اینقدر اصرار به خوب بودن دانشجو مطمئنا غیر عادی خواهد بود!!! توی این تغییراتی که من دادم یه سریش رو میبینی و یه سریش ریز تر بود که باید دو تا رو مقایسه کنی متوجه بشی.. مثلا جمله هات رو کوتاه تر کردم و ازین چیزا....

مرسی که اینجا گزاشتی متنت رو که همه ببینن....

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