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[pegah]

Question:In general people are living longer now.Discuss the causes of this phenomenon.Use spicific reasons and details to develope your essay.
In the past many people died as a result of predicaments such as inflectious deseases or famines.At the time many families intended to have many childrens but the high number of deaths didn't let the population grow.But reverse,nowadays we frequently encounter couples who don't intend to give a birth to even a child.despite,the world's population is increasing conspicuously.But what is the reason of this growth?That's clear,these days people live longer than the past.In other words, the nomber of deaths has got fewer than the nomber of births.There are many reasons responding the cause of this phenomenon.
The most important change making the lifetime longer is medicin developement.As you know medicin has had conspicuous developments during the past years.For erxample several new medicins and drugs,curing deseases,are accessible.In addition many people can get vaccines,preventing them to get some illnesses which were deadly once.Many surgoun robots and other facilities help doctors to save suffere's lives and new cures for several sicknesses are descovered daily.therefore,sick people can be cured with new methods and early death won't be their fate.
Another important reason that helped people to live longer and healthier is agricultural developement.In the past,agriculture was not so advanced as today's.Droughts or pests destroyed the crops.Cponcequently food supplies decreased and many people starved.furthermore at the time ditchs and other advantagous builts,supplying the water needed for irrigation were few and inadvanced.But now scientist are even able to fertilize clouds and force them to rain.Thus,we can make sure that the most important living reqisites are provided.And people nolonger lose their lives as aresult of lacking these.
In the past despite the high nomber of births,the population was balanced,because many young people or children died.Lacking food supplies and suitable cures for deseases were the resons of their deaths.thesedays despite fewer births,the world population is growing.Because the nomber of deaths is fewer than the past and people live for longer.In my opinion humankind owes this to the developement of sciences such as agricuture science and medicine science.Ofcoures there are many problems which still are not solved.But we can be hopeful that scientist will find remedies to solve them and definitely people's lifetime will be much longer in the future.

[Anonymous]

In general people are living longer now.Discuss the causes of this phenomenon.Use spicific reasons and details to develope your essay.My friend, for becoming an expert in writing – any foreign language you say- you need to find a way to interest yourself to do so. Don’t get bewildered with mixing viewpoints. Of course getting instructions from people/ sources would help, but, that’s you who’d decide to choose the way to learn. I am writing some of my own, resembling to what you’ve pointed ( & not an essay) … you might find them worthy to look up to. If this helps, plz let me know to carry on.. in small doses at the beginning.(For right formats for an essay, more organized instructions need to be followed from official writing sources).
In the past many people died as a result of predicaments such as inflectious deseases or famines. Centuries ago, people found it hard to protect themselves from difficulties they faced in their societies. Lack of social facilities made it hard for them to deal with diseases and calamities. At the time many families intended to have many childrens but the high number of deaths didn't let the population grow. To resolve some of these difficulties, women used to give birth to more children. This way they felt that it could compensate the loss they had in disasters. But reverse,nowadays we frequently encounter couples who don't intend to give a birth to even a child.despite,the world's population is increasing conspicuously.But what is the reason of this growth?That's clear,these days people live longer than the past.In other words, the nomber of deaths has got fewer than the nomber of births.There are many reasons responding the cause of this phenomenon.These days’ people live in higher standard situations. Couples usually care more about their own relationships rather than having babies and growing the population of their families. Also, other powerful aspects for living longer are definitely the facilities right now. A life-long dream -for having more civilized-modern living styles- has almost become a tradition for every individual these days. Every body seeks for more facilities invented. Well-paid careers, extravagant houses, powerful situation(s) in works, meaningful relationships, and the most important: healthy situations and cares. Looking at competitive insurance ads in markets, every person can easily find out that people have been impelled to care more about their health’s situations in current societies.
The most important change making the lifetime longer is medicin developement.As you know medicin has had conspicuous developments during the past years.For erxample several new medicins and drugs,curing deseases,are accessible.In addition many people can get vaccines,preventing them to get some illnesses which were deadly once.Many surgoun robots and other facilities help doctors to save suffere's lives and new cures for several sicknesses are descovered daily.therefore,sick people can be cured with new methods and early death won't be their fate.
Another important reason that helped people to live longer and healthier is agricultural developement.In the past,agriculture was not so advanced as today's.Droughts or pests destroyed the crops.Cponcequently food supplies decreased and many people starved.furthermore at the time ditchs and other advantagous builts,supplying the water needed for irrigation were few and inadvanced.But now scientist are even able to fertilize clouds and force them to rain.Thus,we can make sure that the most important living reqisites are provided.And people nolonger lose their lives as aresult of lacking these.
In the past despite the high nomber of births,the population was balanced,because many young people or children died.Lacking food supplies and suitable cures for deseases were the resons of their deaths.thesedays despite fewer births,the world population is growing.Because the nomber of deaths is fewer than the past and people live for longer.In my opinion humankind owes this to the developement of sciences such as agricuture science and medicine science.Ofcoures there are many problems which still are not solved.But we can be hopeful that scientist will find remedies to solve them and definitely people's lifetime will be much longer in the future.

[pegah]

Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways,or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation(buses,trains,subways)?Why?Use spicific reasons and details to develope your essay.
Nowadays,there are two importatnt issues in the feild of transportation. First,the issue of public transportation and second,improving highways and roads.Both of them are important to comfort transportation.But in my opinion the existence of a modern transportation system is more necessary than the other one.There are many reasons,supporting this idia.
First, the most percentage of population is allocated to middle_class people in many societies.Simple workers and non well educated people with low salaries form this social group.They might not have their own cars or they might prefer to use public transportation vihecles to attend their works,maybe because they are cheaper.Thus governments are supposed to privide a suitable system to carry this category of people.
Second,the existence of a modern and proper transportation system helps to solve some of important problems like air pollution and treaffic jam.While a proper public transportation and enough busses and subway stations are accessible ,fewer people intend to use their own cars and drive for long hours.In addition they wouldn't be concerned about traffic tickets and parking spaces.
In my opinion governments ought to spend more funds on improving public transportation,because they are supposed to fulfil the ecpectations of the people who form the bigest section of the population"middle_class people".in addition they can reduce the air pollution and the effects of it such as several deasese which are really expensive to solve.Improving roads and highways would be beneficial too,but it's not as "necessary as improving public transportation.

[pegah]

میدونم که متنم خیلی کوتاهه.با این حال ممنون میشم راهنمایی کنید.

[Saeid]

Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways,or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation(buses,trains,subways)?Why?Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
Nowadays,there are two important issues in the field of transportation. First,the issue of public transportation and second,improving highways and roads.Both of them are important to comfort transportation.But in my opinion the existence of a modern transportation system is more necessary than the other one.There are many reasons,supporting this idea.
First, the most percentage of population is allocated to middle_class people in many societies. Simple workers and non well educated people with low salaries form this social group.They might not have their own cars or they might prefer to use public transportation vehicles to attend their works,maybe because they are cheaper.Thus governments are supposed to provide a suitable transportation system to carry this category of people.
Second,the existence of a modern and proper transportation system helps to solve some of important problems like air pollution and traffic jam. While a proper public transportation and enough buses and subway stations are accessible ,fewer people intend to use their own cars and drive for long hours. In addition they wouldn't be concerned about traffic tickets and parking spaces.
In my opinion governments ought to spend more funds on improving public transportation,because they are supposed to fulfill the expectations of the people who form the biggest section of the population"middle_class people". In addition they can reduce the air pollution and the effects of it such as several diseases which are really expensive to solve(CURE). Improving roads and highways would be beneficial too, but it's not as "necessary as improving public transportation.

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[pegah]

In some countries tenagers have jobs while they are still students.Do you think this is a good idea?Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
In some countries it's common that teenagers get jobs before they graduate.But usually these jobs are not rellated to their majors.They are also commonplace and unimportant usually.Although,these teenagers are obliged to speand most of their time on working instead of study,i think it would be beneficial if the jobs were in the field of their majors.Having a job which is in the realm of the major of a teenager has many advantages.
First of all,students can provide their study costs this way.Some students who are from a middle_class family,can earn money and save it for their study.Furthermore would learn how to be independant and how manage their life costs.We also can be hopeful they'll make responsible adults in the future.Plus,these adolescents usually try to avoid wrongdoings and other morally bad behavors maybe due to retaining their jobs and their posissions.
SEcond,it would be a proper opportunity for adolescents to get familiar with the work world and learning effective methods to prosper in it.They could get lessons from their bosses and learn some practical details.Especially if their work be related to their majors,they can get experienced before they found their own business.Concequently,there would be less lost likelihood for this group.
In my veiw tenagers need to have the experience of being employed before they graduate and enter the work world seriously.I think it would be useful because they could get familiar with the work world and recognize the wrongs causing lost in the business world.So they are able to avoid them and take the way of success .In addition it would be a suitable challenge for them to estimate their independence to manage their costs and their lives.

[pegah]

ممنون میشم نظرتون رو راجع به این یکی هم بگید.پیشرفتی داشتم؟

[Anonymous]

In some countries it's common that teenagers get jobs before
they graduate.


But usually these jobs are not related
to their majors. They are also commonplace
(instruction: usually an event would be commonplace not
an object) and unimportant usually.


It is a general guideline for parents to keep protecting
their children until they turn eighteen. In fact, after finishing school it is
the appropriate time to make some money. But, as mentioned, it has been seen in
some countries that teenagers have to provide themself by finding a job. Regardless
to who this work relaters to the circumstances of a child, an under aged teenager
usually finds it hard to protect him/herself by doing the labor which is
usually beneath her/him.


Although, these teenagers are obliged to spend most of their time on working instead of studying, I think it
would be beneficial if the jobs were in the field of their majors. Having a job
which is in the realm (*instruction:
realm usually is applied for boundaries of a place, and not an object) of
the major of a teenager has many advantages. If a teenager has to find a job
without any specialties/expertise, it is much more rational /worthy for him/her
to do the interests.


First of all, students can provide their study costs this way.
Some students who are from a middleclass family can
earn money and save it for their study. Furthermore, they
would learn how to be independent and how to manage
their life costs. We? They also can hopefully be
responsible adults in the future. Plus, these adolescents usually try to avoid
wrongdoings and other morally bad behaviors due
to retaining their jobs and their possessions. Having
a job can bring some good results to a teenager’s life as well, such as being
responsible about the actions they take and the respective consequences they
are going to face in the real life. Also children who work under rational guidelines
will earn the capabilities about taking care of their own profits from early
ages in life.


Second, it would be a proper
opportunity for adolescents to get familiar with the work world( working
atmosphere) and learning effective methods to prosper
in it? (to get prosperous in a long run). They could (can) get (learn) practical lessons and
details from their bosses /colleagues. Especially if their work be (is) related to their majors, they can get (become) experienced before they found (start) their own business. Consequently, there would be less lost likelihood
for this group.? ( what’re y tryin’ to say?!!!)


In my view, teenagers need to
have the experience of being employed before they graduate and enter the work
world seriously. I think it would be useful because they could (can)
( instructions: when you are writing an essay, you’d better be sure about
your ideas, so it is better to use “can” instead of “could”. “Could” points
about some uncertainty) get familiar with the work world and recognize the
wrongs which are causing lost (deficiencies/
out profits) in the business world. So they are able to avoid them and take the
way of success .In addition it would be a suitable challenge for them to
estimate their independence in order to manage their costs and lives.





P.S: This essay is better than the last one. Congrats! You
made some progress. Please be careful about the punctuation and misspells
you are used to putting in your essays. Also, you need to manage some time
to revise your own writing after you are done with the draft .Do not leave
your desk like this in your exam day. Hope paraphrasing helps, Good Luck.

[Pink Floyd]

In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or TV or studying at traditional
schools. Which would you prefer



I am willing to stay at home dealing with cutting-edge technology rather thatn going to a traditional, somehow-boring school. At home I have the opportunity to use all facilities of new technologies, but at a school the perspective remains dim. Furthermore, at home there are so many ways of interacting with vast majorities of other students, especially those who are native speakers of English.


The upcoming era predictablly belongs to cybernetics and online-technology. Thanks to high-tech computers, the Internet and other facilities, science is now booming, so it is quite important for future students to be expert in all paths of using a computer. In this regard, such facilities of schools look weaker than those located at home. By using equipped computers along with the Internet students can lift up their general knowledge of science, technology and so forth.


Interaction with other people can surprisingly furtify your abilities as a social being. At school you have just the limited number of people with whom you can communicate, that is, your all classmates and probably some of your teachers. However, when you are at home, through the Internet, this may be as many as students who are available in an online course, possibly from different contries or different cultures.

These days English language is the predominant one all aroung the world. By studying at home through the Internet, especially online courses , you have the unique chance to make progress in English. With regard to low quality of teaching English, at least in my home country, being with those having the same concern makes it easier to find people of English language so that asking them to give us a hand in English.


To sum up, I believe bringing educational system to your house is too fruitful an idea to pursue. Using state-of-art technology, interaction with people of different countries and cultures and, lastly, the big chance of being native-like speaker of English are among all its benefits and advantages.

[Pink Floyd]

Topic 159: The twentieth century saw great chnage. In your opinion, what is one change that should be remembered about the twentieth century? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

When it comes to twentieth century, the first eye-catching thing brought to a mind is the World War Two. During the second international war, people unbelievably saw too many cruelties against human and humanity: carnage, uncontrolled violence, devastation of almost all infrastructures of Europe and finally, and unfortunately, the nightmare of atomic bomb. Although this era of human being's histroty can be marked as craziness of mankind, there was a glimmer of hope in gloomy sky, hope for progress, that is, nuclear energy and booming economy after the war.

How cruel some people were, better to say some goverments, marvels me. In 1960s, people all around the world were shocked by some violent and immoral actions made during the war. Some truly named it "bloodbath." More than 20 millions of people were killed within the period of war as well as many cities which were destroyed completely. Many innocent childern left orphan by the grapes of the wrath of war along with millions of breaved women felt grief sorrow suffering from the death of their beloved children, husbands or sibilings.

Today there are several industrialized countries with their electricity supplies - to great extent - based on nuclear power.

With the first attempts made by Nazi Germany to reach nuclear weapons, a voracious competition started, specially among the Allied countries. Some think without the use of Little Boy, the first atomic bomb having made at least 100,000 Japanese disappeard, let me take leave to doubt, having put an end to the war was highly unlikely. Besides its fatal capacities, you must look back to find the first spark of using nuclear energy in its first bed, I mean that war. The war world two had something to add up to our world, nuclear energy.

Eventhough many considere that war a catasrophe, there are some economists who still think the war is God's gift. Whether you believe or not, I want to say the same. You can measure a war as an incentive for some growth, the United States itself can match to this idea very well. During the war all factories, industries and the entire economy were doing the best wholeheartedly. In my opinion, the war made the U.S. a superpower and guaranteed its economy and its dominance over the international affairs.

Although the world war two was the bloodiest war of all history of mankind and resulted in many adversities, it had, like any other human phenomenon, its own benefits. It teaches us we should respect human and humanity much more than we used to. Whether we want or not, it made our history and changed our destiny forever and is still a demanding subject of many studies.