نظرخواهی در مورد متن ایمیل به استادان

[m0h3n]

محمد جان،

نمیدونم چقدر به استادی که میل زدید امید واسه فاند دارید ولی من اگه جای شما بودم،

انقدر توضیح نمیدادم، 1 روز وقت میزاشتم research interests رو مشخص می کردم (نمی گفتم یکی دو هفته وقت میخوام که مشخص کنم)، می گفتم تافل اتچ شده، جی آر ای رو دارم آماده میشم.

اینم که گفتید GPA از 20 هست، بنظرم جمله ی GPA out of 20 باندازه ی کافی واضح هست.

[MaMi]

ممنون محسن جان از جواب
راستش من ایمیل رو بهش زدم (تقریبا با همین متن) و در ایمیل بعدی گفت چون برای Fall 2013 میخوای اقدام کنی، وقت هست. ضمن اینکه قبل از ارسال، یکی دو تا Research Interest دیگه هم اضافه کردم براش ولی خب Topic دقیق بنظرم یکم به فکر کردن احتیاج داشت. در همون ایمیل پرسید که میخوای برای assistantship هم اقدام کنی و من گفتم بدون فاند شرمنده تون میشوم! (یعنی گفتم که من بدون فاند نمیتونم ادامه تحصیل بدم). حالا نمیدونم، به نظر شما باید بهش میگفتم که شما میتونی support کنی من رو یا هنوز یکم زود است؟

[Babak]

همین که گفتید بدون فاند نمی‌تونید معنیش اینه که از ایشون یا دانشگاه انتظار دارید که به شما فاند بده.

[blur]

نظرتونو راجع به این متن میل میدین لطفا


Dear Professor…


I am looking for a research position to match my interests for graduate studies. I received my master's degree in 2011 in horticulture-medicinal plants which resulted in several journal and conference publications. I am eager to continue my studies in PhD level in the University of ...

،The subject of my M.Sc thesis was interaction between zinc nutrition and drought stress of a medicinal plant. Also, I studied some biochemical and physiological characteristics, metabolites and terpenic composition of essential oil in my thesis. Moreover I have worked on a project about the effect of carbon sources and elicitors on
the metabolites of Echinacea purpurea.

Could you please have a look in to my CV, attached to this email, and let me know if you have any positions for PhD studies in your group?

Yours sincerely


یه سوالم داشتم: تو رزومه م میخوام عنوان دوتا مقاله رو بنویسم که در حال آماده کردنشونم. بنویسم under preparation؟

[m0h3n]

@blur

I am looking for a research position to meet my interests for graduate studies. I received my master's degree in 2011 in Horticulture-Medicinal Plants and my Thesis's subject was "interaction between zinc nutrition and drought stress of a medicinal plant" where I could publish my results in etc.

Also, I touched some biochemical and physiological characteristics, metabolites and terpenic composition of essential oil during my Thesis as well as experience about the effect of carbon sources and elicitors on the metabolites of Echinacea purpurea during a project on which I have worked. Now, I'm eager to pursue my studies towards PhD at University of XXX

I will be grateful if you consider me as a candidate to join your research
group as a PhD student in Fall XXX

More information about my background and experiences can be found in the
attached CV and I will be happy to provide more details and answer
possible questions you may have.

Thank you for your time and I eagerly look forward to hear from you.

[Babak]

blur عزیز

نوشتن متن تا حدودی سلیقه‌ای هست و افراد مختلف نظرهای مختلفی ممکنه داشته باشند. به نظر من دو تا پاراگراف اولی که شما نوشتید خوبه و می‌تونید به همون شکل ازشون استفاده کنید. فقط همون طور که محسن هم اشاره کرده، باید بگید at the University of xxx.

در مورد پاراگراف آخر من چیزی شبیه به نوشته محسن رو ترجیح می‌دم:

I will be grateful if you consider me for any possible PhD position in your research group in Fall XXX.

More information about my background and experience can be found in the
attached CV and I will be happy to provide more details and answer
possible questions you may have.

Thank you for your time and I look forward to hearing from you.

[amin_b]

دوستان،
سلام
من به همراه یکی از دوستانم تصمیم داریم برای ارتباط بیشتر به صورت مشترک به یکی از اساتید ایرانی ایمیل بزنیم و امیدوار هستیم بتونیم توجه ایشون رو با این ایمیل جلب کنیم برای ارتباط‌های بعدی. ممنون میشم نظرات خودتون رو در رابطه با کلیت و متن انگلیسی ایمیل مطرح کنید.
پیشاپیش متشکرم

Dear Professor M.,
A. H.and I are two master's students from Iran. We are interested in your field of research. We would like to introduce ourselves to you and have scientific relationship with you and your group, and we hope to qualify to join your research group and your university in future.
Following is a brief about each of us, and our resumes are attached to this email as well. If you require more detail, we will be happy to reply with individual emails. If you permit us we will inform our questions, Ideas and requests by individual emails.


A. H.:
Master's student in MAJOR from NAME OF UNIVERSITY).
I am interested in Cell Biomechanics. Nowadays I am working on designing X as my theses by Army University Of Medical Sciences (biotechnology faculty) cooperation.


A. B.:
Master's student in NAME OF UNIVERSITY and interested in the Mechanobiology of bone healing. I hope that by expanding my knowledge of Mechanobiology, I will find better solutions for the prevention and treatment of bone disease. Currently I am working on my thesis with Dr. G. R. and his group.


Thank you very much for your time and consideration in responding to our inquiry. We are looking forward to hearing from you.
Sincerely yours,


A. H.

A. B.

[Babak]

به نظرم متن خوبی نوشتید، ولی آیا دلیل خاصی داره که می‌خواهید با هم در قالب یک ایمیل با استاد تماس بگیرید؟ آیا پروژه‌های شما مکمل هم هستند و فکر می‌کنید که استاد به این ترتیب بیشتر علاقه‌مند می‌شه که هر دوی شما رو بگیره؟

ضمنا یک نکته هم که چندان به این تاپیک مربوط نیست بگم و اون این که اگر این استاد امریکا هست، به نظرم بهتره که اون قسمت Army University of... رو یک جوری تغییر بدید که ارتباطش با امور نظامی از بین بره. اگر چه ممکنه این موضوع برای پذیرش مشکل خاصی ایجاد نکنه، ولی بعدها برای گرفتن کلیرنس می‌تونه دردسرساز بشه.

[lidoma]

سلام و خسته نباشید متن ایمیل انتخابی من به شرح زیر است اگه پیشنهادی برای اصلاح این متن دارین راهنمایی کنید ممنونا

Dear Prof

I am


I have completed my master program in biotechnology from ........ university – Iran. I have

seen your research area and I am interested to start a PhD program under your

supervision.



I am a skilled biotechnologist with outstanding background in successful tissue

culture and bioreactor engineering. You can find more details on my cv which

has been attached to this email



My research interests are:Natural products
cancer research and scale

up and scale down of bio processes. I have written a book (not published yet),

published papers and I have a patent on Bioreactor design for improvement hairy

root induction to secondary metabolites production .



I believe that my excellent academic record and service work makes me a good

candidate for this position



Please feel free to contact me with any questions or if any additional information is

needed.



Best regards

[amirhossein.gh]

Dear Professor .....


I am My name is .....


I have completed my master program M.Sc. in biotechnology from ........ university – Iran. My GPA is 16.0 out of 20. I am ranked in the 5 top students in our class(if it is real!!). I have

seen your research area and I am interested to start a PhD program under your

supervision.



I am a skilled biotechnologist with outstanding sufficient background in successful tissue

culture and bioreactor engineering. My research interests are:Natural products
cancer research and scale up and scale down of bio processes. I have written a book (not published yet),
published papers and I have a patent on Bioreactor design for improvement hairy
root induction to secondary metabolites production .You can find more details on my cv CV which
has been attached to this email (needs more explanation of your research interest- name of papers, where published, when published, your current and future research work)


please indicate what your IELTS, GRE/GMAT, ... scores are.


I believe that my excellent academic record and service work makes me a good I believe that I could be a good candidate in your research group if I may be admitted. I have a high passion for doing research and I think I have shown my abilities during years of M.Sc. studies .

candidate for this position



Please feel free to contact me with any questions or if any additional information is


needed. I am eagerly waiting to hear more from you. I'd be very honored if I could gain a chance to study under your supervision.



Best regards Sincerely Yours,
Your Name

متاسفانه متن شما ضعیفه و معلومه از چند جا کپی کردین و خیلی نامرتب کنار هم قرار گرفته اند. اگر با اون متن اولی ایمیل میزدین خیلی تو ذوق استاد میزد(ببخشید رک میگم ولی حقیقته و امیدوارم اصلاحشون کنید)
یه سری اصلاحات کردم واستون
امیدوارم اعمال کنید و بتونید بهترین جوابا رو بگیرین