09-04-2012, 08:07 PM
با توجه به این که متن پرسش را نگذاشتید من فقط ادبیاتش رو کمی تغییر دادم. به نظر من انتهای متن نیاز به جمع بندی مشخص تری داره.
In this argument, two items have been compared that have no relationship. Also, this comparison does not show that costs drop during years while profits maximize. In addition, there is no clear reason that shows organizations learn how to do it better over time.
Most noticeably, the argument doesn’t show the costs of processing going down because the organizations learn how to do things better over time and they
become more efficient. In fact, reviewing the example for color film shows after about 14years the cost has changed and it’s more expensive than before.
Because in 1970 the price was 50cents for 5 day service but after that in 1984 cost was 20cents for one-day of service and we understand that the example doesn’t support the main goal.
Moreover, another point that isn't persuasive is that reducing the price is not necessarily an acceptable reason for achieving high quality. The Olympic games
may want to celebrate their 25th year, but it doesn’t mean that the quality of food is the best.
Olympics occur every four years and during these championships some organizations must prepare food for the population that attends these matches. It is possible that the high number of participants lower their ability in having perfect service for customers.
This argument explains some key factors that are not important in the quality of goods and it can’t convince readers .
Most noticeably, the argument doesn’t show the costs of processing going down because the organizations learn how to do things better over time and they
become more efficient. In fact, reviewing the example for color film shows after about 14years the cost has changed and it’s more expensive than before.
Because in 1970 the price was 50cents for 5 day service but after that in 1984 cost was 20cents for one-day of service and we understand that the example doesn’t support the main goal.
Moreover, another point that isn't persuasive is that reducing the price is not necessarily an acceptable reason for achieving high quality. The Olympic games
may want to celebrate their 25th year, but it doesn’t mean that the quality of food is the best.
Olympics occur every four years and during these championships some organizations must prepare food for the population that attends these matches. It is possible that the high number of participants lower their ability in having perfect service for customers.
This argument explains some key factors that are not important in the quality of goods and it can’t convince readers .
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