نظرخواهی در مورد متن ایمیل به استادان

[Saeid]

درود،
بچه ها نظرتون راجع به این متن ایمیل چی هست؟

Dear Professor,

I am a holder of Master’s degree in ...... .I am going to apply to your
department to get an admission in order to study PhD course in your laboratory;.
I have considered your research areas the closest to those of my interest so I
would be very grateful if you could assess my abilities, credentials and
background, and see if you would like let me have the honor of collaborating
with you as a PhD student. My CV is attached.

I am looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.

Yours Faithfully,

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