تصحیح اشکالات گرامری در زبان انگلیسی

[bahar456]

سلام 


ببخشید میخواستم ببینم که این جمله ها رو میشه بهتر نوشت:

I hope working another paper in the field of control could change/upgrade your opinion about my abilities. I am going to apply to the university, for the ambitious goal of working under your supervision, until 5 Jan due to the time I need to write my SOP, for which I needTA or RA funding.