نظرخواهي در مورد متن توصيه نامه

[Matinking]

دوستان سلام، من تو رایتینگ انگلیسی خیلی جالب نیستم، این توصیه نامه رو از رو نمونه های اینترنتی سر هم کردم برای مستر بورسیه ترکیه، ممنون می شم اگه اشکالاشو بهم بگین:

To whom it may concern

I am writing to you in support of Mrs. XxX and her desire to attend Turkey Scholarships the Architecture program. Though many students ask me to make this request on their behalf, I only recommend students whom I feel are well-suited for the program of their choice.

She took Fundamentals of Architectural Design and Technical Design. I found her an intelligent person and she has a deep understanding of the theoretical aspects of the subject and also has the ability to transfer them to practice. Therefore, I recommend her strongly for higher study. I can assure you that she will surely be able to pass your M.Sc. program successfully due to her willingness and abilities. Please don’t hesitate to contact me for more information about the applicant.


[b]Best Regards[/b]

سلام

attend رو به pursue تبدیل کنید...
از graduate به جای higher استفاده کنید...

LoR ها باید توصیف کننده دقیق فرد و ویژگی های اون باشند... این موارد کلی ممکن هست اونطور که باید و شاید موثر واقع نشه...

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سلام

attend رو به pursue تبدیل کنید...
از graduate به جای higher استفاده کنید...

LoR ها باید توصیف کننده دقیق فرد و ویژگی های اون باشند... این موارد کلی ممکن هست اونطور که باید و شاید موثر واقع نشه...

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ممنون از وقتی که گذاشتین، من سعی کردم یه کم تغییر بدم که به جزئیات نزدیک تر بشه اما زیاد موفق نبودم، مثلا تو کارای پژوهشی و زمینه معماری پایدار توانایی و اطلاعات دارم ولی فعلا مقاله ی رسمی که جایی ثبت شده باشه ننوشتم و همه ش پژوهش دانشگاهی بوده، نمی دونم این مطلبو چه طوری بیارم تو ریکام، ممنون می شم اگه یه کم در این مورد هم راهنمایی کنید

To whom it may concern
 
 

I am writing to you in support of Miss. XxX and her desire to pursue Turkey Scholarships the Architecture program. Though many students ask me to make this request on their behalf, I only recommend students whom I feel are well-suited for the program of their choice.

 

She took Fundamentals of Architectural Design and Technical Design. She was one of my best students, in my Technical Design course, and she got a high score which was a reflection of her aptitude. She was very good at technical aspects of architecture and has a good knowledge in this area. I found her an intelligent person and she has a deep understanding of the theoretical aspects of the subject and also has the ability to transfer them to practice. Furthermore she is very creative and has a good problem solving skills. One thing I really admire about XxX is that, she is assiduous in any activity she does, in order to obtain her preferred outcome. Therefore, I recommend her strongly for graduate study. I can assure you that she will surely be able to pass your M.Sc. program successfully due to her willingness and abilities. Please don’t hesitate to contact me for more information about the applicant.

[Matinking]

ممنون از وقتی که گذاشتین، من سعی کردم یه کم تغییر بدم که به جزئیات نزدیک تر بشه اما زیاد موفق نبودم، مثلا تو کارای پژوهشی و زمینه معماری پایدار توانایی و اطلاعات دارم ولی فعلا مقاله ی رسمی که جایی ثبت شده باشه ننوشتم و همه ش پژوهش دانشگاهی بوده، نمی دونم این مطلبو چه طوری بیارم تو ریکام، ممنون می شم اگه یه کم در این مورد هم راهنمایی کنید

To whom it may concern
 
 

I am writing to you in support of Miss. XxX and her desire to pursue Turkey Scholarships the Architecture program. Though many students ask me to make this request on their behalf, I only recommend students whom I feel are well-suited for the program of their choice.

 

She took Fundamentals of Architectural Design and Technical Design. She was one of my best students, in my Technical Design course, and she got a high score which was a reflection of her aptitude. She was very good at technical aspects of architecture and has a good knowledge in this area. I found her an intelligent person and she has a deep understanding of the theoretical aspects of the subject and also has the ability to transfer them to practice. Furthermore she is very creative and has a good problem solving skills. One thing I really admire about XxX is that, she is assiduous in any activity she does, in order to obtain her preferred outcome. Therefore, I recommend her strongly for graduate study. I can assure you that she will surely be able to pass your M.Sc. program successfully due to her willingness and abilities. Please don’t hesitate to contact me for more information about the applicant.

سلام مجدد

بهتر شد...
هرچند هنوز با چیزی که "موثر" تلقی بشه، فاصله داره...
recommender معمولا سعی می کنه با بیان یک خاطره explicit، خیلی objective مشخصات و ویژگی های فردی و اخلاقی applicant رو تصویر کنه... نمره ای که شما اشاره کردید در transcript هم مشخص هست و شاید اینجا بشه به مسائل unique دیگه ای پرداخت که بار اثربخشی LoR رو افزایش بدن...
منتها اگر خیلی در این کار راحت نیستید، می تونید به همین چیزی که compose کردید هم اکتفا کنید...

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[anis]

سلام خواستم بپرسم اگه خودم لگو یونی ازاد بزنم بالای توصیه نامه ایرادای داره؟اگه بخوام از یونی بگیرم چجوریه باید بگیرم

[Matinking]

سلام خواستم بپرسم اگه خودم لگو یونی ازاد بزنم بالای توصیه نامه ایرادای داره؟اگه بخوام از یونی بگیرم چجوریه باید بگیرم

سلام

- اگر قرار هست توصیه نامه به صورت had copy تهیه باشه باید رسما روی سربرگ پرینت گرفته بشه... و اضافه کردن چیزی توسط شما یا هر نوع manipulation دیگه اساسا credibility اون رو تحت الشعاع قرار خواهد داد...

- اگر قرار هست LoR صرفا به صورت متنی در text box ی upload و ذخیره بشه که دیگه لوگو موضوعیت پیدا نخواهد کرد و همون متن مهم و مکفی هست...

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[anis]

من نمیدونم برای یونی المان باید مدارک پست کنم یا اپلود کنم ...اگه بخوام اپلود کنم باید سربرگ باشه یا نه؟و ی سوال دیگه استادی که من میخوام ازش توصیه نامه بگیرم دیگه 2 یونی ازاد درس نمیده رفته دولتی و عضو هیت علمی اونجاست ..حالا من زیر اسمش چی بنویسم یعنی کدوم یونی رو بزنم

[Matinking]

من نمیدونم برای یونی المان باید مدارک پست کنم یا اپلود کنم ...اگه بخوام اپلود کنم باید سربرگ باشه یا نه؟و ی سوال دیگه استادی که من میخوام ازش توصیه نامه بگیرم دیگه 2 یونی ازاد درس نمیده رفته دولتی و عضو هیت علمی اونجاست ..حالا من زیر اسمش چی بنویسم یعنی کدوم یونی رو بزنم

سلام

- نیاز به upload یا hard-copy LoR رو باید per case از دانشگاه مقصد جویا بشید...
در حالت کلی اگر hard copy طلب کنند به نامه رسمی در سربرگ و منقش به امضای استاد نیاز دارید...

- ایشون باید affiliation فعلی شون رو در انتهای نامه اعلان کنند... طبیعتا در متن بیان میشه که زمینه آشنایی و شناخت شما برمیگرده به فعالیت گذشته شون در فلان دانشکاه...

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[parsley]

دوستان ممنون می شم درباره توصیه نامه زیر هم هرچی به ذهنتون می رسه مطرح کنید (لطفا در اسرع وقت):

As a professor at the Faculty of Geography, the University of Tehran, I am pleased to introduce xxx to continue his education in PhD level. Although since my acquaintance with him has passed a little more than two years, his hard work and unique effort has made me able to know him profoundly,so I could judge his academic qualities.

During his postgraduate studies in political geography, I was the assistant professor in one of his courses, and at the short period of a semester, he was able to prove his abilities so that he received the full grade in this course. Throughout the course, he showed a lot of passion for contributing to the arguments. After the course, our rapport and cooperation has continued. His other strength was the effort and enthusiasm in solving problems. Compared to other classmates, he had deeper insight of issues and was always thinking of new solutions to old problems. While many ordinary students only thought about better records, he sought to deep-seated understanding of matters and providing solutions along with trying to achieve higher academic performance. I believe this is one of the most important qualities that distinguishes a student from others. While due to lack of funds and facilities, unfortunately, the least are available even for elite students in our country, he has had some achievements due to self-development and personal endeavor. Among other characteristics, he welcomes any reasonable criticism; he tries to apply rational critiques in his work and I found out that during his class works. If he has any comments about the criticism, he also poses it so that the discussion ultimately leads to such a result which, regardless of personal matters, causes the progress of the scientific teamwork. I believe following his education abroad is a win-win game, so that he can use the scientific environment better and enhance their academic abilities and potential aptitudes and the university can, by utilizing his scientific abilities, in addition to conducting research that may not be carried out by many other students smoothly, at the end of his studies, would introduce a prominent scholar to the science world. Therefore, I consider him to be fully qualified for PhD studies at academic institutions and strongly recommend him.

Please do not hesitate to contact me if you have any questions.

[parsley]

کسی نظری نداشت؟ من تازه می خواستم یکی دیگه هم برای نظرسنجی اینجا بذارم!

[M1KE]

@parsley

اون اوایل متن جمله ای که با although شروع میشه از نظر گرامری غلطه و قابل فهم نیست. اون اواخر هم جمله ای که با I believe شروع میشه خیلی طولانیه و چندین and داره که فهمش رو مشکل کرده به خصوص اواخر اون جمله از نظر گرامری زیاد جالب نوشته نشده و روان نیست. بهتره به چند جمله جدا تبدیل بشه. بقیه متن به نظرم مشکل چندانی نداره.