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[ebrahimsangsefi]

با سلام
میشه یه نگاه به رایتینگ من بندازید و ایراداتم رو بهم بگین.


Agree or disagree? Making sure that people such as the manager or your supervisor know your strengths and accomplishments can help you succeed. Otherwise you cannot achieve anything.
 
There are a lot of advantages and disadvantages associated with illustrating strength and accomplishments in a work. Although there are some people who may think that this action does not work, I firmly believe that sowing what you know in the work can not only illustrate your ability to handle the job but also help you to find your fault and misgivings as soon as possible. Moreover, especially in a group work it hard for the manager or supervisor to identify each person’s proficiency.
Without any doubt, the most important reason to showcase your ability in the work is to illustrate the person’s ability to handle some aspect of the duty. It is a competitive world and I personally believe that, only those people make a good progress in their work that their supervisors know their strength. For example I can refer to my friend. He and me were graduated at the same time and the same university. We choose to work in the same company. After a year he promoted to higher position in the company, where as I was better than him. His success key was to depict what he knows. This attitude has detrimental effect on his progress.
Let us to look at the issue from different angle.  I believe that try to show your ability expedite your progress as well. Please imagine a situation in which a person shows his wrong knowledge to his supervisor. It is more likely that he can find his mistake immediately and will not repeat that in other occasions. On the other hand we must take this in our mind that I do not mention those people who try to pretend and mislead their managers. We have to consider that time is money and as soon we correct our mistake we will progress as well.
For the most part, in a group work it is really hard for the manager to find out who work better in the group. I believe that we live in an era that well-known as dog eat dog world. Sometimes it is a usual event that at the end of a work all people are treated the same, while everyone knows that there are some people that work harder and better. The only way to avoid destroying your work is to make your buss to know your strength and abilities. I think God help those who help themselves.
Unquestionably, in my view it is better for people to make their boss know their abilities. In this way they would be able to kill two birds with one stone. They both show their abilities and correct their mistakes.
 
Agree or disagree? Making sure that people such as the manager or your supervisor know your strengths and accomplishments can help you succeed. Otherwise you cannot achieve anything.
 
There are a lot of advantages and disadvantages associated with illustrating strength and accomplishments in a work. Although there are some people who may think that this action does not work, I firmly believe that sowing what you know in the work can not only illustrate your ability to handle the job but also help you to find your fault and misgivings as soon as possible. Moreover, especially in a group work it hard for the manager or supervisor to identify each person’s proficiency.
Without any doubt, the most important reason to showcase your ability in the work is to illustrate the person’s ability to handle some aspect of the duty. It is a competitive world and I personally believe that, only those people make a good progress in their work that their supervisors know their strength. For example I can refer to my friend. He and me were graduated at the same time and the same university. We choose to work in the same company. After a year he promoted to higher position in the company, where as I was better than him. His success key was to depict what he knows. This attitude has detrimental effect on his progress.
Let us to look at the issue from different angle.  I believe that try to show your ability expedite your progress as well. Please imagine a situation in which a person shows his wrong knowledge to his supervisor. It is more likely that he can find his mistake immediately and will not repeat that in other occasions. On the other hand we must take this in our mind that I do not mention those people who try to pretend and mislead their managers. We have to consider that time is money and as soon we correct our mistake we will progress as well.
For the most part, in a group work it is really hard for the manager to find out who work better in the group. I believe that we live in an era that well-known as dog eat dog world. Sometimes it is a usual event that at the end of a work all people are treated the same, while everyone knows that there are some people that work harder and better. The only way to avoid destroying your work is to make your buss to know your strength and abilities. I think God help those who help themselves.
Unquestionably, in my view it is better for people to make their boss know their abilities. In this way they would be able to kill two birds with one stone. They both show their abilities and correct their mistakes.
 

[Kobani]

Hi
Please, look at to my essay
I am weak in writing task 2, Please, help me with your goood adivces.
Next my test is near.
TPO5

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  At first glance, it extremely difficult to define, due to this point is conditional for people, who has deferent condition. People learn life in world therefore, they more capable for use from their life and enjoy from it. From my vantage point, they want provide intresting lifestyle, hence doing things they like to do. My arguments for this point are listed as follow.

   At an early stage, today people have more ability and afford for doing likely work. They have enough income because world is better place for work than past. Therefore, they can save money, owing to they have enough afford to obviate their needs then dedicate save money for another enjoyable work in during their life such as travel. Too, they can invest their save money, it's increase their afford for spending money, because they gain more meney, when they invest. In addition to, people use from higher technology facilities than past. Work in this condition is very easy and enjoyable, because work become easy therefore, they have enough energy after work for doing enjoyable work. It is means more free time. So, they can benefit from this facilities for recognize with new enjoyable work. Thecnology wide choice for people. So, for example, I work in oil company my income is enough. I not nly save money but also I have three off days in during week. Its means I can going to travel or hill walking. While, my father worked in farm. He always work, but cannot obvite our elementary needs, therefore we never thinked to our enjoyable needs.

   Another my argument is that, nowadays people can follow their plan. Todays, world is very order and reliable than past. Therefore, they can match their plan with society. This order system help to them finishing work ontime. Too, world is higher security than past. Hence, they can spending time in public places, because sometimes for doing likely work should going to public places for example watching to football match. In addition to, people have better comunication, when use from coherent plan. They have not unsuitable expect from their time. When they going to dance clube, they expecte exiting place. If they have not good comunication cannot endure themselves in near together. This condition cause they more recognize with new culture and costum. Therefore, they have variety choice for spending time.

   To put everything in a nutshell, in spite of the undeniable fact today people doing thing, which they like do, because they have deferent condition for life such as they have more ability and afford and they can follow their plan. I say one thing, today people always take risk, bcause they want enjoy from their life.

[Kobani]

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people better gain knowledge in school or out of school.
فقط من این متن رو تو 35 دقیقه نوشتم. اگه میشه بگید برای رسیدن به 30 دقیقه و کمتر باس چیکار کنم.

In these days, people have been considering good method to educate themselves, due to human always have tried to advancing in rational way. While some people maintain that education outside school is better method to learn, there are others holding the idea that learn in school is more beneficial. As far as I am concerned, education in school is more effective in that not only are school is achieved to participate in academic situation, but it is socialized method.

The first reason which should be maintained her is that going to classroom is enhnaced method to learn knowledge. Students be find suitable answer for their quistions, because they ask from teacher or they be face with variety questions from other students. Therefore, they learn new knowledge. For example, most of schools in our country use from online system after their class time, because they believe this method help to them always ask questions and participate in academic atmosepher. Additionally, students use from various facilities. They going to lab, library etc. They use from them to identify with lesson. Besides, It causes learning process become last. To illustrate, student have geogrphy lesson, it needs map, lab and another material to imagine well-know countries and situation of hill, river etc. Hence, lab and library are good places to touch reliaty of topic.

Another factor which deseives to be considered is that class are taught student to learn social skills. Class is suitable opportunities to join to study group. Likewise, they be consult, and then recognize with new experiences, because other students have different viewpoint. It causes they learn new method to study, solve problem etc. For instances, students, who be join to group talk about their problem with their co-workers. They think about this topic beside together, and they help to themselves to find solution. Apart from, students find friends. They design personal plan for their break time. As well as, they spend time beside each other, and they be talk about privat life and local culture. It causes students recognize with new customs, cultures event languish. Hence, they be enhance their knowledge about other people with different beliefs. Such as, students be find friends, and then they going to hill walking. This trip is long time, and they spend time with together. They should be talk about themselves till enjoy from their time or they play beside together. These activities are mediocre method to learn social skills.

To put everything in a nutshell, education in school is wise decision, owing to people easily promote their knowledge and they become socialize. Highly recommended is countries should be build advanced school to absorb more students for help to society.

[amircoder]

این تاپیک خیلی غیر فعاله ولی باز من انشا رو میزارم لطفا اگر کسی دیدش بگه غلطی داره یا نه  و...

The main idea of both the reading and the lecture is about a professional portrait which is resemble to the Jane Austen's face. Considering this, the author claims that there are several reasons which lead us to believe that Austen was the subject of the portrait. The professor, on the other hand, categorically denies whatever was mentioned in the reading through citing several reasons.
 
First, the reading states that Austen's family announced that the subject of the portrait was Jane Austen. The professor refutes this point by states that they announced this assertion many years later after she died. Therefore, their claim could not be true.
 
Second, the author claims that the face in the portrait is similar to Jane Austen so that it was found in one of the Cassandra's sketches .However, the professor contends that it is not significantly resemble to Austen's face ; thus, it maybe belong to one of the another Austen's family members.
 
 
Third, the reading states that there is an evidence that shows the portrait was painted by Ozias, who probably was hired by Austen's family to paint Jane Austen’s face. The lecture opposes this point by saying that Ozias was not living in London when Jane Austen was living there as a teenager, and when Ozias went to London Jane Austen had about 27 years old.

[moradimina15]

سلام ممنون میشم دوستان یهنگاهی هم به رایتینگ من بندازین
 When it comes to the issue of spending too much money on pets, some people believe that there are not better uses for this money, while others hold the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the latter attitude carries more weight. In what follows I would like to address some conspicuous aspects of my view point.
 
The most compelling point of why I believe that people can spend this money in more beneficial matters is that there are lots of children who lose their parents in childhood and need someone not only as a support, but also as a friend. Moreover, according to the research which was conducted by one of the most reputable university in my country, most people take care of pets to زalm themselves. Therefore, communicating with a child instead of an animal will be more effective for those who take custody of a child. My uncle have had not any children for many years; eventually, they took custody of a little boy and added more excitment and enjoymen to their life.
 
Another rationale of why do not concur with the first perspective in the introductory paragraph is that there are many charitable organizations which people can donate some money in and feel more satisfaction. On the other hand, taking care of an animal at home has its downsides and cause more problems for the boss due to the fact that animals are incontrollable.  My sister has a cat; the cat always damages the furnitures and breaks the glasses tools at home.
 
Nevertheless, what I alluded in the two body paragraph should not be overgeneralized. That is there might be a situation in which having a pet at home is the best way for people to spend their money. For example, one of my friends fond a small bird in the street which was injured by an incollusion with a car. He brought that bird at home and spent lots of money for hospitalising the bird; after some days it cured but could not fly. There for, he decided to take care of it forever. 
 
In the final analysis, situations what I mentioned about my friend is fairly rare which cannot be taken as a general rule. Therefore, I agree with the view that there are many better use rather than spending money on pets. 
 
 
 
 
 
A secure job right away or wait for a more satisfying job?
When it comes to the issue of trying to find a job some people believe that a secure job right away is not as suitable as waiting for a more satisfying job, while others hold the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the latter attitude carries more weight. In what bellow, I would like to illustrate my reasons for this view point.
 
The most important feature of a job for me is the amount of enjoyment that I have while doing it. According to the research which was done by one of the most reputable university in my country, peoples feeling and attitudes have great impact on their efficiency. I will exemplify my point with a true story about something that once happened for me. My uncle has a company, when I graduated from university, he offered me to work as an accountant in his company.  Unfortunately, I did not enjoy it very much at all, but I was in urgent need of money, so I accepted it immediately. After some days, while working, I lost my temper very fast and got tired at work. Besides, I could not communicate well with clients (appropriately). That is, I quit the job and decided to find a more enjoyable job.
 
Another reason why I do not concur with the first opinion in the introductory is that most people in the world go to work for making money. By accepting a secure job, they not only can not …. their life, but they lose also the time  which can spend on finding a more satisfying and well-paiding job. The more income one has, the more comfortable life and self-confidence he has.
 
 
Nevertheless, what I mentioned in the two body paragraphs should not be overgeneralized. There are some people who prefer to take the first job even less profitable which is offered to them. Their view can be partly reasonable and there might be a situation in which they can learn from their current job for preparing in the future and get experience. I admit that in my example about my first job in my uncle's company, I got variety of new propitious experiences which was beneficial for my latter job.
 
From what expressed above we can conclude that what I mentioned about my useful experiences in a company and situations like that, are occasionally acceptable and very rare. Therefore, we can not use it as a general rule. What would happen for me if my experiences in the first job were totally different from new job? So I strongly agree with the second perspective in the introductory paragraph.
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

[ice]

این هم پنجمین و آخرین متن فعلا تا ترم بعد

Is competition good?
 Generally speaking, I think competition is not only  good but also it is necessary to advance in your career, education, etc. But However,one an important point is that we should be able to discriminate between competition and jealousy which is really harmful for the person’s mental health.
At first, I want would like to speak about competition and specify its boundaries. Competition means making yourself better in comparison to another one person who that is better than you in a specific aspect of life. So as you see competition is just trying to reach to the summit earlier than another one. It is somehow good because in this way, you try to adjust your paces with another one’s and make yourself faster without slowing down that person. So competition will make you more successful and you will always keep in mind that your current position is not the end and there are higher positions to reach to.
On the other hand, we have jealousy. When you are jealous of another person, you will try to make yourself better but meanwhile at the same time you will focus on hindering that person from trying more and inadvertently most of your concentration will be the other person not yourself. You will take try every scheme to reach to the goal of defeating that person, but because he is attempting with his own pace without paying attention to anyone else, you get stymied and it makes you nervous, impeding you from trying to reach to your own goals.
So in my opinion competition is good as much long as it doesn’t turn to jealousy. It will make you compare yourself with your peers and try to be better than them. So especially for people who have a lot of diligence, competition would be a good way to get familiar with higher summits and try to reach to them.
 

من تافل آزمایشی امیر بهادر شدم 95 اما رایتینگو شدم 17
سه ماه فرصت دارم وضعیتو بهتر کنم . میشه با تصحیح این رایتنیگ کمک کنید
Integrated Writing 


In these sets of material, the article introduces the concept of team work and expresses a number of advantages for it, for instance, higher progress speed, better development of the project because of wider range of knowledge and skills of team than of each of the individuals, on the other hand, the lecturer states an experience conducted by a company cast doubt on efficiency of team work.
First, the reading article claims that because of higher knowledge and a wider range of skills of a team than of an individual, the project conducted by a team would develop better and more efficiently. On the other hand, the lecturer states that a company which conducted a team work project found out that some of the members took advantage of other team member’s hard work and didn't contribute to the project's progress at all. It is evident that these people had a free ride, and this refutes the article's point which claimed that a project would better be conducted by a team than of an individual.
In addition to that, the article articulates that a project would be managed faster and more expeditiously by a team,. on the contrary However, the lecturer cast doubts on this statement by saying that usually lower development and progress speed is observed when a project is led by a team, because team members have to spend a lot of time to reach an agreement, and obviously although a consensus is essential for a team   work, it is time consuming too as well
Last but not least, the article's allegations regarding about team work being rewarding and team members higher satisfaction about the outcome is proven false by the lecturer, when he expresses the company comprehended that some team members had more influence on the others, and usually  these members' ideas are counted as more creative and beneficial and when some of other team members' warnings of abortiveness of such ideas are neglected these members not only are not satisfied by their team's decision but also feel disappointed when the undesirable results of the team's decisions are blamed on all of the team members including them.


آگه هم بتونید راهنماییم کنید که چه کار کنم و تمپلیت های مناسب بهم معرفی کنید ممنون میشم 

سعي كنيد تا تسلط كامل به كلمات نداريد ازشون استفاده نكنيد. به كارگيري كلمات ساده تر ولي به شكل صحيح ارزش بيشتري داره تا كلمات دشوارتر اما با اشتباه.

Parents' involvement with their children's studies - Past Vs Present
Nowadays education is an important section part in all peoples' life, especially young people's - who are the future grownups-,  because, their future job and life style depends on their education. Since parents know this importance and they want a brilliant future for their kids, they are paying more attention to this part of their children's lives.
First, previously parents did not know much about education, and children's future position in the society was not relevant to their education either . I remember once my father told me that when he was going to school his parents could not help him since they were not educated, and  but he tried and tried a lot to got  educated finish his education, and finally he received found a good job opportunity. He also helped his brothers and sisters, so now my father and his siblings have high academic degrees and good jobs. Now all of them know how important it is to be educated and they have encouraged their children to get in to prestigious universities.
Second, A high percent of parents these days are academically educated-this makes them experienced- so they know what is good for their children because they have a good knowledge on education and since they are employed, they know what is good for their children and what improves their future. In this case they can guide their kids in on to the right paths, that take them to a brighter future. I remember the time that I was going to choose what to study in the university,. My dad helped me a lot on that subject, he discussed a lot of many things with me which that was very helpful and made me choose Physics as my major and I am really proud of it. While parents in the past did not have these  this helpful knowledge so they could not help their children as much as parents nowadays . today
To summarize, since nowadays parents know more about  education and how valuable education is to their children’s lives thean parents in the past, and as most of the parents have high academic degrees these days they have the knowledge and experience to help their children make good/better decisions.
 
 
 

گاهي جملات زيادي طولاني شدند. نوشتن جملات با ساختار طولاني و پيچيده خوب هست، ولي وقتي بيش از حد طولاني بشه هم از دست خواننده خارج مي شه و هم اشتباهات دستوري ممكن رخ بدن. nowadays يكي مونده به آخر به دليل تكرار مجدد در خط بعدي براي زيبايي جايگزين شد.

ممنون میشم نظرتونو درباره این رایتینگ اینتگریتد بگید 
Online encyclopedias Vs. printed encyclopedias
The reading article states that while online encyclopedias are beneficial they have some very important problems that makes them unreliable, on the contrary the listening article disagrees with the reading passage, and refutes all of the allegations expressed by the reading article one by one.
First, the reading passage articulates that because users who are not academically trained are involved in the process of writing online encyclopedias' articles, these encyclopedias suffer from a lack of academic credentials and reliability,. However, the listening passage states that neither of the offline nor online encyclopedias are without faults and errors, but the online encyclopedias have one advantage that the offline ones don’t have. The online encyclopedias are viewed by plenty of users every day and therefore they are more likely to get corrected if an error is observed, and in this sense not only are they not less reliable but also actually are with have fewer error and faults.
In addition, the reading article claims that online encyclopedias are susceptible to hackers and vandals, and this provides them with an opportunity to tamper the materials in the cyclopedia and fabricate wrong information, on the contrary, the lecturer believes that online encyclopedias realize the importance of internet security, and use strategies like utilizing read-only article formats and hiring expert and professionally trained special editors to prevent any fabrications.
Last but not least, the reading article states that online encyclopedias are too focused and present the viewers with articles that are partial and biased about what is important and what is not in an article. Once again, the lecturer refutes the point claimed by the reading article by saying that because space is not an issue in online encyclopedias as in offline printed ones, the information is more diverse and  not only this which is not a bad feature, but also an advantage that online encyclopedias have over offline ones,. and Also, the lecturer actually believes that it is these are printed encyclopedias that are vulnerable to bias viewpoints stated by professional but few editors who write these encyclopedias.
 

cyclopedia كه به كار برديد اگر اشتباه تايپي نباشه خيلي قديمي هست و الان استفاده نمي شه. جملات بيش از حد طولاني استفاده كرديد كه بهتر جاي ويرگول هاي متعدد گاهي از نقطه هم استفاده كنيد.

[ice]

با سلام
میشه یه نگاه به رایتینگ من بندازید و ایراداتم رو بهم بگین.


Agree or disagree? Making sure that people such as the manager or your supervisor know your strengths and accomplishments can help you succeed. Otherwise you cannot achieve anything.
 
There are a lot of advantages and disadvantages associated with illustrating strength and accomplishments in a work. Although there are some people who may think that this action does not work, I firmly believe that showing what you know in the your work can not only illustrate your ability to handle the job but also help you to find your faults and misgivings as soon as possible. Moreover, especially in a group work it is hard for the manager or supervisor to identify each person’s proficiency.
Without any doubt, the most important reason to showcase your ability in the work is to illustrate the person’s your ability to handle some aspect of the duty. It is a competitive world and I personally believe that, only those people make a good progress in their work that their/whose supervisors know their strength. For example I can refer to my friend. He and me I (formal writing uses I) were graduated at the same time and from the same university. We choose (past of choose) to work in the same company. After a year he was promoted to a higher position in the company, even though/whereas (when meaning "in contrast" it is one word not two words) I was better than him. His key to success was to depict show what he knows. This attitude hads a positive detrimental effect on his progress.
Let us to look at the issue from a different angle.  I believe that trying to show your ability expedites your progress as well. Please imagine a situation in which a person shows his wrong gives incorrect knowledge to his supervisor. It is more likely that he can find his mistake immediately and will not repeat that in on other occasions. On the other hand, we must take this in our keep in mind that I do not mention  mean those people who try to pretend and mislead their managers. We have to consider that time is money and as soon we correct our mistakes we will progress as well.
For the most part, in a group work it is really hard for the manager to find out who works better in the group. I believe that we live in an era that is best known well-known as a dog eat dog world. Sometimes it is a usual event that at the end of a work job all people are treated the same, while everyone knows that there are some people that work harder and better. The only way to avoid destroying your work future is to make your buss to know your strength and abilities. I think believe God helps those who help themselves.
Unquestionably, in my view it is better for people to make help their boss know their abilities. In this way they would be able to kill two birds with one stone. They both show their abilities and correct their mistakes.
 

job و work با وجود شباهت تفاوتهاي معنايي و كاربردي دارند، حتما موقع استفاده دقت كنيد كه جاي هم ننويسيد و هر كدوم رو به شيوه دستوري خودش استفاده كنيد.
جهت استفاده صحيح از I/me يا he/him جمله رو براي خودتون جداگانه بنويسيد. به عنوان مثال بخش دوم he and I graduated به شكل زير مي شود:
I graduated
Me graduated
همون طور كه مشخص در اينجا اولي درست بوده و قابل استفاده هست.
كاربرد صحيح كلمه خيلي مهم هست. depict يعني به تصوير كشاندن براي همين اينجا خيلي قابل استفاده نيست. اگر درباره معني هم شك داريد اصلا استفاده نكنيد مثلا از detrimental استفاده كرديد. اين كلمه يعني tending to cause harm (مخرب بودن) ولي شما به شكل مثبت ازش استفاده كرديد. 

Hi
Please, look at to my essay
I am weak in writing task 2, Please, help me with your goood adivces.
Next my test is near.
TPO5

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due to this point is being conditional for people, who has have deferent (maybe you meant different) conditions, at first glance, it is extremely difficult to define. People learn life in world therefore, they more capable for use from their life and enjoy from it. From my vantage point, they want provide intresting lifestyle, hence doing things they like to do. My arguments for this point are listed as follow.

   At an early stage, today people have more ability and afford for doing likely work. They have enough income because the world is a better place for work than in the past. Therefore, they can save money, owing to they have enough to afford to obviate their needs then dedicate save money for another enjoyable work in during their life such as travel. Too Also, they can invest their save money savings, it's which increases their afford for spending money, because they gain more meney, when they invest. In addition to, people use from higher greater technology facilities than the past. Work in this condition is very easy and enjoyable, because work become easy therefore, It is means more free time and they have enough  energy after work for doing enjoyable work activities.  So, they can benefit from this these facilities for recognize with new enjoyable work. Thechnology wide choice for people. So, for example, I work in an oil company my income is enough. that I not only save money but also I have three off days in during the week. Its This means I can going to travel or hill walking. While  However, my father worked in on a farm. He always worked, but cannot could not obviate our elementary needs, therefore we never thinked to thought  about our enjoyable needs. 

   Another my argument is that, nowadays people can follow their plan. Todays, the world is very ordered and much more reliable than past. Therefore, they can match their plan with society. This orderly system helps to them finishing work ontime. Too Also, the world is higher security a more secure place/safer than the past. Hence, they can spending time in public places, because sometimes for doing likely 
(appropriate?) work they should going to public places for example watching to a football match. In addition to, people have better comunication, when use from coherent plan. They have not unsuitable expect from their time. When they going to dance clubes, they expecte exiting the place. If they do not have good comunication they cannot endure cope being close to others/ each other themselves in near together. This condition causes they more them to recognize with a new culture and custom. Therefore, they have variety of choices for spending their time.

   To put everything in a nutshell, in spite of the undeniable fact today people doing things, which they like to do, because they have a deferent condition for life such as they have more ability and can afford and they to follow their plan. I say one thing In short, today people always take risks, bcause they want to enjoy from their life.[url=http://www.academiacafe.com/pf/newreply.php?tid=164&replyto=80180#][/url]

اين متن بخصوص پاراگراف اول خيلي قابل فهم نبود و در نبود عنوان موضوع با خواندنش نتونستم متوجه بشم قرار درباره چي صحبت كنيد. به همين دليل هم نتونستم كاملا تصحيحش كنم و موارد كلي رو علامت زدم. مثالها  كمك كردن اما شيوه نگارش تسلط كافي به موضوع نداره، سعي كنيد بيشتر موقع نوشتن انگليسي همه چي حتي عناوين رو هم به انگليسي در ذهنتون بياوريد تا با ترجمه همزمان سبب اشتباه و عدم فهم مطلب نشه. براي تمرين روزمره حتي مي تونيد يه دفتر خاطرات ساده تهيه كنيد كه اگر با برنامه ورد بنويسيد سرعت نوشتنتون هم مي ره بالا.
دليل به كار بردن بعضي كلمات رو نمي شد فهميد مثلا deferent ، اگر اشتباه تايپي نباشه اين كلمه به معني بيرون برنده، خروجي يا از روي احترام مي تونه باشه. همون طور كه اگر بخواهيم به يك خارجي فارسي ياد بديم وقتي بهش مي گيم "بله" و "آري" هر دو يعني yes بايد ياد بگيره كه اين دو كلمه به ظاهر هم معني كاربرد يكسان ندارند و اگر فرضا كسي صداش كرد نمي تونه جاي بله بگه آري. ما هم نمي تونيم بدون اطمينان از كاربرد كلمات فقط چون لغت نامه معني مشابهي براشون گذاشته ازشون به جاي هم استفاده كنيم.

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people better gain knowledge in school or out of school.
فقط من این متن رو تو 35 دقیقه نوشتم. اگه میشه بگید برای رسیدن به 30 دقیقه و کمتر باس چیکار کنم.

In these days, people have been considering good better methods to educate themselves, due to because humans have always tried to advanceing in a rational way. While some people maintain that education outside school is the better method to learn, there are others holding the idea that learning in school is more beneficial. As far as I am concerned, education in school is more effective in that not only are schools is achieved used to participate in an academic situation environment, but it is a socialized socializing method.

The first reason which (that it) should be maintained her is that going to the classroom is an enhanced method to learn (if using "learn" do not use "knowledge", otherwise write gain knowledge) knowledge. Students be can find suitable answers for their quiestions, because they ask from the teacher or they are be faced with a variety of questions from other students. Therefore, they learn new knowledge information. For example, most of schools in our country use from the online system after their class time, because they believe this method helps to them always ask questions and participate in an academic atmosephere. Additionally, students use from various facilities. They by going to the lab, library etc. They use from them to identify with learn lessons effectively. Besides, it causes learning process become last (didn't understand what you meant, maybe you wanted to say: it helps the learning process). To illustrate, students have geogrphy lessons, it which needs maps, lab and another material to imagine well-know countries and the situation location of hills, rivers etc. Hence, the lab and library are good places to touch reliaty (???) of topic.

Another factor which deseives deserves to be considered is that during class students are taught to learn social skills. Classes is are suitable opportunities to join to study in groups. Likewise, they be can consult with each other, and then recognize with gain new experiences, because other students have different viewpoints. It causes they them to learn new methods to study, solve problems etc. For instances, students, who be join to groups are more likely to talk about their problems with their co-workers in future. They think about this the topic beside together, and they help to themselves to find a solution. Apart from what was mentioned, students find friends. They design a personal plan for their break time. As well as Also, they spend time beside each other, and they be talk about their private life and local culture. Or they spend time outside school in activities such as mountain climbing, and during these long trips talk about themselves and through these mediocre activities learn social skills ( instead of: Such as, students be find friends, and then they going to hill walking. This trip is long time, and they spend time with together. They should be talk about themselves till enjoy from their time or they play beside together. These activities are mediocre method to learn social skills.) . It This causes students to recognize with new customs, cultures event languish languages. Hence, they be can enhance their knowledge about other people with different beliefs. 
To put everything in a nutshell, education in school is a wise decision, owing to helping people easily promote advance/develop their knowledge and they become socialize. It is Highly recommended is that countries should be build advanced schools to absorb more students for help to society.

اين متن از قبلي بهتر هست. اشتباه داره و هنوز كمي ترتيب مطالب مشكل داره ولي مانع از فهم نمي شه. صحيح نوشتن رو فداي تند نوشتن نكنيد، اگر غلطها زياد باشن فهم متن رو بسيار دشوار مي كنه.
كاربردهاي the-can-be-from رو بيشتر مطالعه كنيد، بخصوص مثالهاي بيشتري رو ببينيد تا بتونيد علاوه بر آشنايي كلي با شيوه استفاده ازشون به راحتي به كار ببريد.

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این تاپیک خیلی غیر فعاله ولی باز من انشا رو میزارم لطفا اگر کسی دیدش بگه غلطی داره یا نه  و...

The main idea of both the reading and the lecture is about a professional portrait which is resembles to the Jane Austen's face. Considering this, the author claims that there are several reasons which lead us to believe that Austen was the subject of the portrait. The professor, on the other hand,  categorically denies whatever was mentioned in the reading through by citing several reasons sources
 
First, the reading states that Austen's family announced that the subject of the portrait was Jane Austen. The professor refutes this point by states stating that they announced this assertion  many years later after she died. Therefore, their claim could not be true.
 
Second, the author claims that the face in the portrait is similar to Jane Austen so and that it was found in one of the Cassandra's sketches. However, the professor contends that it is does not significantly resemble to Austen's face;. Thus, it maybe/might belong to one of the another Austen's family members.
 
 
Third, the reading states that there is an evidence that shows the portrait was painted by Ozias, who probably was hired by Austen's family to paint Jane Austen’s face. The lecture opposes this point by saying that Ozias was not living in London when Jane Austen was living there as a teenager, and when Ozias went to London Jane Austen had was about 27 years old.

سلام ممنون میشم دوستان یهنگاهی هم به رایتینگ من بندازین
 When it comes to the issue of spending too much money on pets, some people believe that there are not better uses for this money, while others hold the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the latter attitude carries more weight. In what follows I would like to address some conspicuous aspects  of from my point of view
 
The most compelling point of reason why I believe that people can spend this money in more beneficial matters is that there are lots of children who lose their parents in childhood and need someone not only as a support, but also as a friend. Moreover, according to the research which was conducted by one of the most reputable universities in my country, most people take care of pets to alm ("alms" means money given to the poor. Maybe you meant "calm") themselves. Therefore, communicating with a child instead of an animal will be more effective for those who take custody of a child. My uncle did not have had any children for many years. Eventually, they took custody of a little boy and added more excitment and enjoymen to their life.
 
Another rationale (rationale usually means a "set of reasons" not one reason use it carefully) of why I do not concur with the first perspective in the introductory paragraph, is that there are many charitable organizations which people can donate some money in and feel more satisfaction. On the other hand, taking care of an animal at home has its downsides and can cause more problems for the boss due to the fact that animals are iuncontrollable.  My sister has a cat; the cat that always damages the furnitures and breaks the glasses tools at home.
 
Nevertheless, what I alluded to in the two body paragraph should not be overgeneralized. That is /in other words, there might be a situation in which having a pet at home is the best way for people to spend their money. For example, one of my friends found a small bird in the street which was injured by an in colluision with a car. He brought that bird at home and spent lots of money for hospitalising it; after some days the bird was cured but could not fly. Therefore, he decided to take care of it forever permanantly.
 
In the final analysis(Not an appropriate phrase in this case. You could use "To summarize", or something similar), situations what that I mentioned about my friend is are fairly rare which and cannot be taken as a general rule. Therefore, I agree with the view that there are many better uses rather than spending money on pets. 
 
 
 
 
 
A secure job right away or wait for a more satisfying job?
When it comes to the issue of trying to find a job some people believe that a secure job right away is not as suitable as waiting for a more satisfying job, while others hold the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the latter attitude carries more weight. In what Bellow, I would like to illustrate my reasons for this view point (view point does not have the same meaning as "point of view")
 
The most important feature of a job for me is the amount of enjoyment that I have experience while doing it. According to the research which was done by one of the most reputable universityies in my country, peoples feelings and attitudes have a great impact on their efficiency. I will exemplify my point with a true story about something that once happened for to me. My uncle has a company, when I graduated from university, he offered me to work a job as an accountant in his company.  Unfortunately, I did not enjoy it very much at all, but I was in urgent need of money, so I accepted it immediately. After Some days, while working, I lost would loose my temper very fast and goet tired at work. Besides, I could not communicate well with clients (appropriately). That is Therefore, I quit the  my job and decided to find a more enjoyable job one.

 
Another reason why I do not concur with the first opinion in the introductory, is that most people in the world go to work for (in order) to makeing money. By accepting a secure job, they not only can not …. their life, but they lose also the time  which can spend could be spent on finding a more satisfying and well-paiding job. The more income one has, the more comfortable life and self-confidence he has.
 
 
Nevertheless, what I mentioned in the two body previous paragraphs should not be overgeneralized. There are some people who prefer to take the first job, even though it is less profitable, which is offered to them. Their view can be partly reasonable and there might be a situation in which they can learn from their current job for preparing in the future and get gain experience. I admit that in my example about my first job in my uncle's company, I got a variety of new propitious experiences which was  proved beneficial for my latter future job.
 
From what was expressed above, we can conclude that what I mentioned about my useful experiences in a company and situations like that, are occasionally acceptable and very rare. Therefore, we can not use it as a general rule. What would happen for me if my experiences in the first job were totally different from my new job? So I strongly agree with the second perspective in the introductory paragraph.
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Topic 1a supporting the city life: **

Some people prefer to live in the country. Others prefer to live in the town or big cities. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

 

Since the dawn of humanity, human beings have been involved in a great struggle to find an appropriate and convenient accommodation. In today's world, however, there is a heated controversy over living in the city or in the country. In my opinion, the virtues of the city life significantly outweigh those of the country life. I incline to the city life for some reasons, among which the issue of health, the quality of life, and children's upbringing are more considerable.

 

The astounding machine age in which we live and the unexampled development of technology have modified the essence of human life. Our cities today enjoy high-speed internet, which lets us communicate in a convenient and speedy manner; modern malls that provide any kind of products from around the world; different modes of transportation that simplify and accelerate transportation; and high-tech sport, education, as well as recreational centers that bring us a more satisfying life. Practically, in such a place, each of these activities can be done in an advanced fashion, and one can have access to various state-of-the-art facilities which help him or her to know more and enjoy the merits of them. These facilities, on the other hand, are sadly absent in the country, which, based on today’s standards, causes the quality of life to be so low, making it almost impossible for many to live a high-quality life there.

 

Another privilege of the city life has to do with the general health that one can benefit there. The accessibility to the experienced doctors, modern hospitals, advanced level of hygiene, and varied training facilities in physical and mental grounds which a city enjoy guarantee its people's health. In contrast, lack of efficient medical services in the country - skilled doctors, modern facilities, and diverse medicines - can lead the country residents to confront quite a few vital problems. It may be true that country dwellers enjoy the serenity of the countryside and a healthy diet, but illness is an inseparable part of the life of human beings, since in the circumstances of urgent need for medicinal services, the time that is needed to rush to the hospital in the city may even leads to a mortal consequence for the ailing person. Living in a city includes these integral services, which brings an invaluable convenience for the people who live there.

 

Decent upbringing of children plays a crucial role in family and social solidarity of any given society, which is sadly lacking in the country. It may be claimed that the corruption-free atmosphere in the country paves the way for a proper upbringing of children and makes the country a utopia for any thoughtful parent. However, poor educational conditions and having a limited access to advanced upbringing facilities that are inherent features of the country cause the youth not to boost in varied grounds, and their potential abilities are not recognized. Those who live in the city, by contrast, can provide a decent upbringing for their offspring thanks to the state-of-the-art educational services. Their children are knowledgeable and aware of their abilities, so they have considerable opportunities to have triumph in quite a few aspects of life.

 

In summary, with all this taken to account, I do believe that the city rather than the country is the ideal place for living on the ground that one can live a modern life, can bring up their offspring in an adequate fashion, and have access to high level of hygiene and health care. Who can ignore these essential facilities and live in a country simply for solace?

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Mahdieh Mollaie: Payame Noor University

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با سلام خدمت دوستان عزیز
من شهرستان هستم و  دسترسی به کسی ندارم که تو این زمینه کمکم کنه.
خیلی ممنون میشم ازتون، لطف کنین این writing رو بررسی کنید و ایراداتم رو بهم بگید.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject

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In today’s world, no one can ever cast a shadow of doubt on the vital role of the knowledge in the quality of our lives. Universities are one of the most important references of the learning science, literature, linguistic, art and many other fields. Some people think it is essential and necessary for them to have broad and extensive knowledge. These people, however, are wrong at least when it comes to advantages and benefits that being expertize in one specific subject bring to them. In my opinion, todays’ world needs to people who are expert in his or her major. Experts have opportunity to get high level job and can help in developing edges of knowledge. Therefore, I believe that it is better to specialize in specific subject in order to achieve these valuable purposes

    One of the most important thing to realize is that job’s opportunity is for people who are expert in a field. Nowadays, industrials, companies and offices need to people who have creativity and ability to solve complex problems. In my point of view, the necessary condition for being creative is being expert. All works have especial purposes, so those need special workers. For instance, in my country, Iran, students in bachelor degree just take general courses. But those courses don’t have any function on industry. As a result, none of the bachelor students have opportunity to get job. Because of that some intelligent students go on to study master degree. At master degree they learn special courses and familiar with special software that give them ability to work in special field. Therefore, I am going to study master degree to increase my chance to get better job

Another important reason is developing knowledge. Nowadays, world needs individuals who can develop and modify knowledge in order to create better life for all. People who have just broad knowledge can’t create major changes in any fields. In recent century, people who spent their life on one specific subject changed the path of our life. They moved edge of knowledge and had ability to educate many other people. It seems to me, experts will change the future as well as experts changed it at the past

Taking everything into consideration, one can easily conclude that because of importance of increasing chance of taking job for individual and developing edge of knowledge for society, it is better to specialize in one specific subject