نمونه Writing های تافل iBT خود را در این تاپیک قرار دهید.

[Pink Floyd]

Hey Nima
It's necessary for you to revise your essay to find semantic and syntactic errors.
So you must assign at least the last five minutes of your writing part to do that.
Pace yourself and write as much as you can. Then take your time in order to find mistakes you've made in your writing.

[Pink Floyd]

Hey Nima,
I forgot saying that in my viewpoint is completely wrong, you should say either from my viewpoint or in my opinion.

[pegah]

سلام .این اولین رایتینگمه.ممکنه خیلی اشتباه داشته باشم.ممنون از زحماتتون.

question; do you agree or disagreewith the following statement? parents are the best teachers.use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

-some people argue that parents are the best teachers because they love their children and wish the best for them.they are very kind and pationt and they are always by the children.but i think they cant be the best teachers whereas they sometimes have not competence to bring up the children.

parents are incompetent for several reasons. they may are ignorant and blind or evevn are addictive and criminal.so how can they convey the way of life to some one else while they dont know the corect way .which leads the human to success and tranquility? how an infant can learn from them the way of prospering.obviously they cant show the best way and cant instruct to the infants how to counter with problems and dificulties in meanwhile their lives.

anyway there are also parents that spend inordinate love on their children

.and overlook their faults that is awful sometimes. so rigidity and seriousness is necessary and influential to iliminate wrongs.

some people belive that parents can be the best teachers because they love their children or maybe because they are the first persons that infant sees them and imitates them. i think they may have the most influence on their kid but they will not be the best teachers unless they have the knowlage of how to bring up the children properly .

[Pink Floyd]

درود
چرا اصول نگارش و نقطه گذاری رو رعایت نمی کنید؟ غلط املایی تابلو هم که دارید. دوباره همین رو بنویس با اسلوب های مشخص نگارشی. ابتدای متن یه پنج تا space بزن. بعد از پایان هر جمله یه فاصله. اولین حرف باید بزرگ نوشته بشه. همین متن رو ادیت کن دوباره بذار.

[AVA]

سلام .این اولین رایتینگمه.ممکنه خیلی اشتباه داشته باشم.ممنون از زحماتتون.

question; do you agree or disagreewith the following statement? parents are the best teachers.use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

-some people argue that parents are the best teachers because they love their children and wish the best for them.they are very kind and pationt and they are always by the children.but i think they cant be the best teachers whereas they sometimes have not competence to bring up the children.

parents are incompetent for several reasons. they may are ignorant and blind or evevn are addictive and criminal.so how can they convey the way of life to some one else while they dont know the corect way .which leads the human to success and tranquility? how an infant can learn from them the way of prospering.obviously they cant show the best way and cant instruct to the infants how to counter with problems and dificulties in meanwhile their lives.

anyway there are also parents that spend inordinate love on their children

.and overlook their faults that is awful sometimes. so rigidity and seriousness is necessary and influential to iliminate wrongs.

some people belive that parents can be the best teachers because they love their children or maybe because they are the first persons that infant sees them and imitates them. i think they may have the most influence on their kid but they will not be the best teachers unless they have the knowlage of how to bring up the children properly .

سلام پگاه جان
من خواستم تا اونجاییکه می دونم متن شما رو اصلاح کنم ولی با توجه به اینکه متنی که نوشتی شبیه essay برای تافل نیست،ترجیح دادم اول جند توصیه دوستانه براتون بنویسم :

• توصیه می کنم حتما وقت بیشتر برای مطالعه متون انگلیسی بذارین تا با اصطلاحات و کلمات مترادف بیشتری آشنا بشین ( متن شما از لحاظ به کار گیری واژه های متنوع و اصطلاحات انگلیسی ضعیف هست).علاوه بر این، با مطالعه بیشتر یاد خواهید گرفت که انگلیسی فکر کنید و بنویسید.
  
• حتما کتابهای گرامر بیشتری مطالعه کنید چون یکی از معیارهای نمره دهی برای Writing در TOEFL این هست که شما بتونید مفاهیم مورد نظرتون رو به سبک های مختلف نوشتاری در متن بیارین ( مثلا : prepositional phrase, Adverbial structure, verbal structure, etc )
• در متن شما از از transitional words به شکل و اندازه مناسب استفاده نشده بود که با مطالعه گرامر این ایراد به زودی رفع خواهد شد.
• متنی که برای تافل می نویسید بهتره که حداقل شامل 5 پاراگراف باشه که کلا سازماندهی پارگرافها هم از الگوی مشخصی پیروی می کنند. خوبه که کتابهایی که نمونه writing تافل رو دارند بیشتر بخونید.

برای شروع من یه کتاب براتون اینجا گذاشتم که به دردتون می خوره.
موفق باشی دوست من

[pegah]

ممنون میشم رایتینگمو تصحیح کنید

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It has been said that every thing that is learned contained in books."compare and contrast knowledge gained from books,which source is more important?Why
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Some people argue that experience has a more significant effect on our knowledge.In other words they belive thet the proof of the pudding is in the eating.They argue that we can learn important life lessons by experiment diverse situations.Other people intend to use other's experiences instead. They prefer to conserve their time and rely "books". But, in my opinion the best way for learning is reading books and learn lessons from other's achievements or losses. I think there are many advatages with this method_reading the books_that make it more suitable than experiecing.

Learning by books have been common for thousand of years.That is a proper method to learn because of several reasons.The first reason that makes the books more important that experienc is that we can get an immense sum of information in a short time.For example we can underestand that the earth is circular and it has several continents and oceans on its surface by using an encyclopedia.That takes just a few minutes to read and percieve these materials.But if we wanted to find out them by ourselves and without trusting the books probably we never understood,since it would take many years,maybe even longer than our life years.SecondBookis are very cheap sources.

Sometimes, to examin objects, we are forced to spend much money on the project.For example when we want to examin the safety of a new car.In addition some objects are hazardous to experiment.For example imagin some one who does not believe that a plant is poisonous and he wants to examin it. He may get injured or even die.Plus to these reason there are many other benefits with books. In my view bokks are avalable every where and every time.We can read them and when we are not agree with idias presented in a book, we can use other books concerned with the subject and compare the idias and make an appropriate conclusion easily.furthermore there is no loss with doing this.

in comparison the results of experience may be inaccurate or irretrievable. concequently i should say that books are the best way to learn.Ofcource i percieve that experience has more vegerous impact and the result of that remains in mind for a longr time. But that does not convince me that every thing is examinable.Some times the
objects and conditionds are not avalable or it takes a long time to examin.Thus we would bwtter to rely the experiences of the past people and read the books.

[ahmadpashaei]

ممنون میشم رایتینگمو تصحیح کنید

سلام پگاه جان.اونطوری که در برگه نوشتی یعنی با رعایت همه بخش بندی ها و پاراگراف بندی ها باید متن رو بذاری!! اینجوری واضح نیست! در خط اول بعد از learned یک فعل دیگه (contained) آوردی؟! خط چهارم دو غلط املایی: believe that. و eating نیاز به the نداره. خط پنجم: بعد از experiment نمیتونی اینجوری ترکیب وصفی بیاری و برای اتصال دو ترکیب اسمی نیاز به حرف اضافه ای مثل for,throughout و .... داری.در خط 6 بعد از but نیازی به ویرگول نیست فکر کنم! در خط هفتم learning میشه چون باید به بالانس فعلهاتون توجه کنید.n رو در advantages جا گذاشتین و در مورد بکار بردن with نمیتونم نظر بدم. بقیه باشه برای بعد یا دوستان دیگه!

[blur]

با سلام...یه چندتا نکته کوچولو هم به نظر من
رسیده.....


در Learning by books have been commo، از اونجایی که learning مصدره و مفرد محسوب میشه پس فعل رو باید مفرد
بیارید. makes it more suitable درسته.
SecondBookis are very cheap sources جمله بهم ریخته. منظور از vegerous چیه؟ همچین کلمه ای نداریم. Examine ,Available وConsequently هم املاشون نادرست بود که یه کم به چشم میومد.

[Saeid]

یه چیزی که از نظر گرامری درست نیست جمله :

when we are not agree with ideas presented in a book

agree به صورت فعل هستش و همچین ترکیبی ما نداریم. درستش میتونه به این صورت باشه:

when we do not agree with ideas presented in a book

یه مقدار پاراگراف بندیش درست نیست. بهتره طبق پاراگراف بندی اون کتاب barron's essay باشه.

مطلب بعدی اگر منظور از عبارت ' experiment diverse situations' موقعیت های آزمایشی مختلف باشه, اشتباه نوشته شده و درستش به صورت زیر میتونه باشه:

diverse experimental situations

مطلب بعدی این که فعل 'rely' معمولا با حرف اضافه 'on' به کار بده میشه در عبارت 'rely on books'
اینا مواردی هست که به ذهنم رسید. البته یه مقدار ایراد punctuation هم دارید که باید روی اون هم کار کنید.
موفق باشید.

[pegah]

از همه ممنونم که وقت گذاشتن و تصحیح کردن. سوالی که دارم اینه که با توجه به نوشتم واسه پیشرفت رایتینگم باید چی کار کنم؟ البته واسه این رایتینگ حدود 40 دقیقه وقت گذاشتم و سعی کردم به زمان امتحان نزدیک باشه.حالا نمیدونم با روزی یه رایتینگ نوشتن میتونم بهتر بنویسم یا یه فکر دیگه کنم؟ ممنون